Band 8 Essays

 

C hildren and rules

In some countries children have very strict rules of behavior, in other countries theyare allowed to do almost anything they want. To what extent should children have tofollow rules?

The extent to which children have to follow rules is in itself a very complex issue, sincechildren across the world grow up in very different cultures. In India for example, thelevel of morality is very high and children are to be very submissive to their parents aswell as other adults around them. This, however, is not the case for the Western countriesof the world where children follow the motto

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Thou shalt do what thou wilt

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as promoted by celebrities and rock stars. I believe that following strict rules has both advantages aswell as serious drawbacks as discussed below.Firstly, strict rules of behavior create responsible and respectful children who in turnmature into respectful adults. This forms a stable society which is virtually free fromvices such as prostitution and drug abuse. Secondly, if children do not follow strict rulesof behavior, they will get out of hand and become work- shy and indolent. This will thencreate a burden on society since the government has to find ways to cater for these socialills.However, forcing children to follow strict rules of behavior doesn

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t always yield positiveresults as discussed above, most of the time it backfires and works against society. For example, teenagers are more likely to do the opposite of what they

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re told to do simply because they want to be independent. Children should also have rights to exercise their freewill and develop their own pattern of behaviors. Strict rules simply destroy theindividuality of children if they

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re imposed on them.At the end of the day, it is clear that children should be guided by rules, but these rulesshould not be imposed on them because as human beings, they need to have room todevelop their own traits of character and adopt a behavioral pattern of their own.

This essay is too long (309 words instead of advised 250-265). Otherwise this work is avery good one; it covers the task, your position is clear, the ideas are well-organized,expressed, explained and supported. The sentences show a wide range of language structures, cohesive devices and the grammar is fine. Overall, looks like a band 7.5 or higher essay.

IELTS Writing Actual Test in January, 2016 – Topic: Internet & Newspaper
Although more and more people read the news on internet, newspapers will remain the most important source of news for the majority of people. Do you agree or disagree?

Band 8.0 Model Essay

It is true that a growing number of people are using the Internet in order to find out the latest news. While newspapers are still popular, I strongly disagree that most people will continue to rely on them as a source of news.

The first reason for my view relates to the increasing use of the Internet around the world. Today, a growing number of people have access to online news via technological gadgets such as smart phones or tablets, so they do not need to buy a newspaper to obtain news. Even in more remote corners of the world, access to the Internet is becoming more widespread and the online community is growing daily.

Secondly, online news is always up-to-date while printed news needs time for editing, printing and delivering. In this fast changing world, readers tend to expect updated information about what has just happened or is happening around them. Online news can be broadcast immediately with vivid pictures and relevant stories, making it more appealing to readers than printed news.

Finally, the Internet is a repository of information for people to dig for information that they need. Digital information can be stored in mass quantity, which allows internet users to search for events that occurred in the past. In contrast, newspapers are generally hard to preserve because of the corrosive effects of the environment and their sheer bulk makes storage difficult. This once again confirms the edge of online news.

In conclusion, I firmly believe that the Internet is even now replacing newspapers as the principal medium for accessing all the latest news.

(267 words – written by IELTS Trainer)

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